Travis Kavulla has some "Thoughts on Michelle Obama's Thesis." As his title suggests, they are neither smart nor sound thoughts: they are merely thoughts. Kavulla is not a dumb man. He may even be a nice man. So I grant, for the moment, that his thoughts on Michelle's Obama's thesis represent neither his mind nor his character; because if they did, they would speak quite poorly of both.
First and foremost, the object of his critique is an undergraduate thesis. It is not written deliberately—with the care a graduate student would write a seminar paper or a law student compose a sample brief—but in bursts of research crammed in between unrelated coursework. (No scholar works on a paper while simultaneously trying to master studentized range distributions and Bowen's reaction series.*) So undergraduate theses tend to resemble fun-house reflections of their committee's interests.
For example, remember my undergraduate thesis? Were someone to dredge it up when my wife went up for tenure on the assumption it reflected my current beliefs and standards, I would dismiss them as frivolous. My senior thesis is the product of an immature mind warping John Protevi's passion for continental philosophy into an embarrassing melange of big words and bad ideas. Like any successful undergraduate, I could outline [.pdf] other people's thoughts but had problems generating any of my own. So I did what every undergraduate does:
I mimicked. I experimented. I minced the careful prose of my betters until it emitted a fragrance I thought odoriferous, everyone else odorous.
But I've changed. In the years since I wrote my undergraduate thesis, I've learned how to parrot the conventions of my betters more convincingly, and that research consists of more than finding a theory that conveniently accounts for what I've already determined to be very important facts. In short, I've honed the skills I once wielded with all the subtlety of toddler with a broadsword.
Now for the ironic part:
I'd still be an oversized infant struggling to hack with a sword twice as wide as he was tall were it not for one of Kavulla's co-bloggers. When I first arrived in Irvine, I talked BIG TALK. I impressed people with my manifest impressiveness. One day, after witnessing me conquer fellow graduate students in an after-seminar bull-session, a fellow by the name of Jim Zeigler pulled me aside and recommended I read Mark Bauerlein's Literary Criticism: An Autopsy.
I was humbled. Not that I agreed (or agree) with Bauerlein, but the idea that someone was challenging the theoretical orthodoxy I'd come to believe sacred was exactly the corrective I needed. I'd uncritically embraced post-modern/post-structuralist theory as an undergraduate and needed some distance. I needed to read something like this:
["Discourse"] has a loaded meaning, but a vague referent, and the vagueness is necessary to this mode of inquiry. In using it, critics can attenuate their descriptions, yet still sound authoritative. "Discourse" usage converts a methodological weakness into a theoretical exigency. "Discourse" is an essential constituent of inquiry, description, definition, and so an inquiry into any particular discourse must hold off from being too determinate, too positive. The ubiquitousness of discursive products (norms, values, distinctions, etc.) fosters a healthy skepticism toward the methods of empirical investigation (hypothesis testing, observation, fact-finding). Hence critics can make incidental citations of this and that discourse, the mention of them indicating a world of relevant sociopolitical processes, and rightly neglect to fill in the concrete sociopolitical ingredients of the discourses cited. The meaning of "discourse" and the methodological evanescence of it vindicate empirical thinness and oblique statement. (57)
Before you ask: I'm only quoting the conclusion; Bauerlein shows his work in the book. Reading that forced me to refine my vague Foucauldian notion of what constituted "discourse" into something methodologically respectful ... something I couldn't use to lord over my fellows in a cloud of abstraction. I became a respectable scholar in graduate school.
Would that Kavulla could give Michelle Obama the benefit of that same doubt.
*Lynn Fichter is right: Mineral pictures are hot.
"I admire your candor!"
Really though, I do.
Posted by: Jake | Saturday, 23 February 2008 at 09:51 PM
"It is not written deliberately—with the care a graduate student would write a seminar paper or a law student compose a sample brief—but in bursts of research crammed in between unrelated coursework."
Unrelated coursework and partying, hanging out, and sexual excess.
I hope so, anyway. Because if not, Obama will not get my vote.
Posted by: John Emerson | Saturday, 23 February 2008 at 10:44 PM
People whose views and intellectual frameworks never change scare me. People who don't understand that other peoples' views and intellectual frameworks can change without it being evidence of weakness annoy me. People who assume that their intellectual path and opinions represent a final or optimal position on anything ... often get really well-paying gigs commenting on the frailties of other people.
I got out without writing a senior thesis, and actually managed to avoid having any of my writings archived until late graduate school. Then I started blogging, and all hope of a political career was shot to hell!
Posted by: Ahistoricality | Sunday, 24 February 2008 at 01:01 AM
@John
I'm sorry, Michelle Obama lost my vote months ago.
Posted by: Naadir Jeewa | Sunday, 24 February 2008 at 05:29 AM
If you're not careful, Scott, I might just pull out your senior thesis and do a reverse fisking, showing it's not as bad as you make it out to be! Il faut pas exagérer quand même!
Posted by: John Protevi | Sunday, 24 February 2008 at 08:56 AM
Jake,
Thanks ... I think.
John,
I defy you to find anything redeeming in it that's not directly attributable to your, Pat or Water's influence.
Ahistoricality,
Then I started blogging, and all hope of a political career was shot to hell!
You know, I've been thinking about this in regards the market and tenure, and I wonder whether it's true. You can just as easily overwhelm someone with oodles and oodles of facts, muddying the waters with, well, thousands of particles of silt. (hilzoy's recent post detailing Clinton vs. Obama's legislative records comes to mind. I mean, how many people do you think looked through all that?)
Posted by: SEK | Sunday, 24 February 2008 at 01:06 PM
I enjoyed how Kavulla mocks a college student for a grammatical error, then hyphenates "African-Americans" when he uses it as a noun. Good stuff.
Posted by: Florida Prof | Sunday, 24 February 2008 at 01:26 PM
how many people do you think looked through all that?
If you mean Hilzoy's posts, I did, actually. I thought it was a draw, mostly.
With regard to the larger point, though, it's true that you can sometimes overwhelm an unengaged audience (and many tenure/hiring committees qualify) with masses of acceptable if unexciting material, but engaged ones (and it seems like there's always one in a committee) will have certain things they're looking for -- what touches their interests, or inflames their passions. They will fix on those details and make snap decisions based on them, reinterpreting all the rest of the material in that light. And you never know what it is, usually: I've seen job candidates derailed by offhand comments in a campus visit, things I'm sure they don't remember saying.
Sometimes it's a good thing, obviously: you can make someone happy almost as quickly as you can make them unhappy. And we're approaching -- I fervently hope -- a tipping point where technological and public engagement will be seen as more of a positive than a negative.
Posted by: Ahistoricality | Sunday, 24 February 2008 at 02:15 PM
Wow... I always did wonder who that "clever neophyte imitating his superiors and learning the trade" from Bauerlein's introduction was.
Or was it Michelle Obama?
Posted by: aaron | Sunday, 24 February 2008 at 03:32 PM
I ran across your post by accident and had a good laugh. Your comments about undergraduates who trot out theoretical frameworks in order to justify their own perspectives hit close to home for me. I just finished my undergrad career a few weeks ago, and I spent the fall flinging Butler and Foucault at one of Cormac McCarthy's novels. I think I'm very familiar with the topic you discuss, but I still would like to believe that what I wrote was solid.
I'm thinking of giving Bauerlein's book a read just to hear what he has to say. I did some digging, and read this, an article he wrote a few years ago. I think his book could be interesting:
http://www.press.jhu.edu/journals/philosophy_and_literature/sample.html
Thanks for pointing me to his book. I'm looking forward to reading it.
Posted by: Nick | Sunday, 24 February 2008 at 03:42 PM
Just one, very small update to this post: Jim Zeigler is no longer a Visiting Assistant Professor at SMU, but a tenure-track Assistant Professor at the University of Oklahoma. He's been a great addition to the OU faculty!
Posted by: Ben Alpers | Sunday, 24 February 2008 at 06:38 PM
Though I'd hate to be judged by my senior thesis, I am concerned that MO repeatedly states that this is the first time she has been proud of America. This suggests to me that the premise of her senior thesis has not been abandoned.
Posted by: Johan Brahme | Monday, 25 February 2008 at 02:21 PM
As for that last bit, I remember watching some PBS special back in 1986 around the Statue of Liberty's centenary, and, in the what does "liberty" mean section at the end, hearing James Baldwin be the only one with courage to point out that for most Black Americans liberty was at best a promise denied. Anyone confused by any ambivalence Michelle Obama might have felt regarding feeling really proud of America has no understanding of what it's like to be African American or indeed of American history.
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